Improving Essay Writing
Đã gửi: Thứ 6 Tháng 10 02, 2009 2:14 pmDear all,
I have faced with some difficulties in improving my writing skill, and I would like to post hereinafter my essay for all of you to help me improving it. Hope to receive a lot of comments to make it more connection and coherence.
Topic: What music brings to people? Use reasons/examples to prove/explain your point.
Music effects on everyone. In fact, different form of music has differently affects on the life style of people. Lullaby songs bring up and educate children, traditional songs teach people patriotism and hatred of enemy, and soul-stirring music urge people to act strongly with sources of inspiration. In my point of view, music has positive and negative effects on people in many different ways.
In some ways, music has positive effects on people. Music can bring up and educate children. The newborn baby is often lulled to sleep by the adult, these sweet lullaby songs is adsorbed in their mind day by day, that forms the baby’s thinking and behavior and that transmit the mother’s love to the child. The lyrically songs establish in mind of children the love for their family and country. Besides that, the calm music transmits the inspiration to the listeners, it helps them reducing stress and relaxation, and it also helps them to create the new things and work with high efficiency. For example, my close friend, he is a programmer, he always listens to music during his working time and he said that “Music brings me up. It gives me creative inspirations and concentrating on my work highly.” Moreover than that, the soul-stirring music such as revolution or rock music urges people to act stronger, this kind of music brings to people the strength of union. For instance, in the Sea Game competition, Vietnam football team is scored by Thailand, and Vietnamese fans on the stage sing a motivated song to rise up the companionship and patriotic spirit. That spirit transmits to the player, so they feel more enthusiastic and stronger, that helps them defeat Thailand. As a result, good music brings people up.
On the other hand, music has negative effects on people. Listening to the loud music may cause deaf on the listener because loud music has high sound frequency that breaks listener’s eardrum. Furthermore, the loud music causes the noise that prevents people concentrating and sleeping. For instance, in my house, my roommate often plays on loud music that prevents me concentrating on my study and sleeping. Music influences on people in various ways, bad and sorrowful music may cause disheartened and unendurable feeling. My experience is that, listening to such kind of sorrowful music when I’m down; it drives me insane and lost of control to do nothing. In fact, huge instant songs are carelessly composed and played everywhere regardless of quality. Obviously, this music impacts on the listener’s mind. Especially the young people, it urges them acting violently and aggressively. Therefore, the negative affects of music on people must be cared and avoided.
In brief, music has positive and negative effects on people in variety of ways. You choose the suitable form of music to listen is important. Thus, you can balance yourself and live in peace.
I have faced with some difficulties in improving my writing skill, and I would like to post hereinafter my essay for all of you to help me improving it. Hope to receive a lot of comments to make it more connection and coherence.
Topic: What music brings to people? Use reasons/examples to prove/explain your point.
Music effects on everyone. In fact, different form of music has differently affects on the life style of people. Lullaby songs bring up and educate children, traditional songs teach people patriotism and hatred of enemy, and soul-stirring music urge people to act strongly with sources of inspiration. In my point of view, music has positive and negative effects on people in many different ways.
In some ways, music has positive effects on people. Music can bring up and educate children. The newborn baby is often lulled to sleep by the adult, these sweet lullaby songs is adsorbed in their mind day by day, that forms the baby’s thinking and behavior and that transmit the mother’s love to the child. The lyrically songs establish in mind of children the love for their family and country. Besides that, the calm music transmits the inspiration to the listeners, it helps them reducing stress and relaxation, and it also helps them to create the new things and work with high efficiency. For example, my close friend, he is a programmer, he always listens to music during his working time and he said that “Music brings me up. It gives me creative inspirations and concentrating on my work highly.” Moreover than that, the soul-stirring music such as revolution or rock music urges people to act stronger, this kind of music brings to people the strength of union. For instance, in the Sea Game competition, Vietnam football team is scored by Thailand, and Vietnamese fans on the stage sing a motivated song to rise up the companionship and patriotic spirit. That spirit transmits to the player, so they feel more enthusiastic and stronger, that helps them defeat Thailand. As a result, good music brings people up.
On the other hand, music has negative effects on people. Listening to the loud music may cause deaf on the listener because loud music has high sound frequency that breaks listener’s eardrum. Furthermore, the loud music causes the noise that prevents people concentrating and sleeping. For instance, in my house, my roommate often plays on loud music that prevents me concentrating on my study and sleeping. Music influences on people in various ways, bad and sorrowful music may cause disheartened and unendurable feeling. My experience is that, listening to such kind of sorrowful music when I’m down; it drives me insane and lost of control to do nothing. In fact, huge instant songs are carelessly composed and played everywhere regardless of quality. Obviously, this music impacts on the listener’s mind. Especially the young people, it urges them acting violently and aggressively. Therefore, the negative affects of music on people must be cared and avoided.
In brief, music has positive and negative effects on people in variety of ways. You choose the suitable form of music to listen is important. Thus, you can balance yourself and live in peace.