#082: Nguyen Thi Thanh Thuy

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Hello! my fullname is Nguyen Thi Thanh Thuy. I am studying in the gifted high school of Quang Binh,
Now, I am living in Dong Hoi city where is far from my hometown. There are 4 people in my family: my parents, sister & me. My mother is a teacher and my father is a worker. They are a part of my life.
My hobby are reading books, receiving and sending messages with my phone.
For me, I am verry friendly so I have more friend.and every body loves me much.
I am not confident in my English but I take part in the English writing contest to improve myself. Thanks

[Thiên Bình]

Contestant #82: Nguyen Thi Thanh Thuy
Subject: QBO-EWC Introduction
Score: Pass

Corrections & Suggestions:

Hello! m(M)y fullname (two words) is Nguyen Thi Thanh Thuy. I am studying in the gifted high school of Quang Binh,(period) Now,(no comma) I am living in Dong Hoi city where is far from my hometown. There are 4 people in my family: my parents, sister & (and, please write out) me. My mother is a teacher and my father is a worker. They are a part of my life. My hobby (-ies, subject verb agreement) are reading books, receiving and sending messages with my (by) phone. For me, I am verry (very) friendly so I have more friend(s).and (watch out for spacing and punctuation) every body (one word) loves me much. I am not confident in my English but I am take (-ing) part in the English writing contest to improve myself. Thanks(!)

Additional Comment:

You didn’t write much so it is hard for me to give you any other advices. The next round will be more challenging and for sure that you will get more English practice from the experience. Although your essay is clean and neat, there are still a few typos that I’ve noticed so be careful of that. Also, treat an exclamation like a period and check your spellings. Please review the correction above and good luck on the next round. – Thiên Bình

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@Anh Duc: Thank you, I've added your correction.

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Contestant #82: Nguyen Thi Thanh Thuy
Subject: QBO-EWC Introduction
Score: Pass

Corrections & Suggestions:

Hello! m(M)y fullname (two words) is Nguyen Thi Thanh Thuy. I am studying in the gifted high school of Quang Binh,(period) Now,(no comma) I am living in Dong Hoi city where is far from my hometown. There are 4 people in my family: my parents, sister & (and, please write out) me. My mother is a teacher and my father is a worker. They are a part of my life. My hobby (-ies, subject verb agreement) are reading books, receiving and sending messages with my (by) phone. For me, I am verry (very) friendly so I have more friend(s).and (watch out for spacing and punctuation) every body (one word) loves me much. I am not confident in my English but I am take (-ing) part in the English writing contest to improve myself. Thanks(!)

Additional Comment:

You didn’t write much so it is hard for me to give you any other advices. The next round will be more challenging and for sure that you will get more English practice from the experience. Although your essay is clean and neat, there are still a few typos that I’ve noticed so be careful of that. Also, treat an exclamation like a period and check your spellings. Please review the correction above and good luck on the next round. – Thiên Bình

@ QA: I found 1 small error "I have more friend(s).and ... "