#121:Hoai

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My name is Hoai but my friends usually call me " small cat". I am 17 years old.

I was born at Nghia Ninh village. It is a rather poor one, however, with the rapid development of our country, the life has been improved much day by day. My parents are all farmers so family's life is rather hard, especially when the price is becoming higher and higher. Therefore, I try my best to learn well with the hope to change and improve my life as well as have ability to take care of my parents as they are old. As a result of the fact that I passed and now I am learning in 11 English class at Quang Binh gifted school. I think this is the best school in Quang Binh province for me to learn and practice. My school has given many priorities to all of us. I was awarded the good student and was given some scholarships. These rewards help me a lot in my material and mental life. Moreover, they also give me encouragement to learn better.

I have had many difficulties in my study and my life, however, due to the supports of my parents, my teachers and my friends, I have tried to overcome those. I usually read comics in my free time to get out of stress. My hobbies are playing sports and collecting coins. They bring me a lot of fun. I also like doing volunteer work and taking part in outdoor activities. In addition, I want to make more friends all over the world and that's why I choose English to learn.

As all of us, I wish to have a good job and a happy family in the future. However, my present wish is to pass the university exam next year. I think this is the best road leading me to my future. Therefore, I want to join this contest to improve my English writing to make good preparations for my future. And I hope all my wishes will come into truth.

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My name is Hoai but my friends usually call me " small cat". I am 17 years old.

I was born at Nghia Ninh village. It is a rather poor one, however, with the rapid development of our country, the (ommit it)life has been improved much day by day. My parents are all farmers so (our) family's life is rather hard, especially when the price is (living expenses are) becoming higher and higher. Therefore, I try my best to learn well with the hope to change and improve my life as well as have ability to take care of my parents as they are old. As a result of the fact that I passed (the entrance exam) and (ommit), now I am learning in 11 English class at Quang Binh gifted school. I think this is the best school in Quang Binh province for me to learn and practic(s)e. My school has given many priorities (priviledges) to all of us. I was awarded the good student (ranked as a good student) and was given (awarded) some scholarships. These rewards help me a lot in my material and mental life. Moreover, they also give me encouragement to learn better.

I have had many difficulties in my study and my life, however, due to the supports of my parents, my teachers and my friends, I have tried to overcome those. I usually read comics in my free time to get out of (release) stress. My hobbies are playing sports and collecting coins. They bring me a lot of fun. I also like doing volunteer work and taking part in outdoor activities. In addition, I want to make more friends all over the world and that's why I choose English to learn.

As all of us (Like everyone), I wish to have a good job and a happy family in the future. However, my present wish is to pass the university (entrance) exam next year. I think this is the best road leading me to my future. Therefore, I want to join this contest to improve my English writing to make good preparations for my future. And I hope all my wishes will come into truth (true).

Judge: Linh Nguyen,

Score: Pass,

Comment:

Dear Hoai,

Your writing is pretty good and standard although it still needs improving. Try to take advantage of this contest to improving yourself. Good luck to you in the next round and your future exams.

Very best,

Linh Nguyen.