#024: Nguyen Tien Thanh

[luvmyacnq]

I am a Vietnamese boy. My name is Nguyen Tien Thanh. My friends often call me a nick name "Best @". I am seventeen years old. I was born and grown up in Hoan Lao town, Bo Trach District, Quang Binh Province. Now I am in class 11A2 of Bo Trach High School - Number 1. There are four people in my family: my father, my mother, my brother and me. My father is a soldier, my mother works in Bo Trach Bank. My brother is a student. I love them very much and they love me, too.
I go to school with my friends by bike everyday and it takes me about fifteen minutes to go from my house to school. At school, I learn many subjects but the subject I like most is English. I like studying English very much because it is very interesting and I think it will be very useful for my future job. In my opinion, the difficulties in learning English are listening, writing essays, vocabulary and pronunciation. However, I always try my best to improve them.
I have a lot of hobbies such as: reading books, watching TV, playing games, playing sports. But the thing I like most is reading books. My favorite kinds of books are novels, funny stories and detective stories... Reading books helps me entertain and relax when I feel sad and tired. I think not only I but also everybody in the world like reading books because books play an important role in our life.
In my life, I like making acquainted with many people. My friends say that I am a humorous person and I think so. My friends share my happiness and sadness. They will console and help me out of difficulties. Now I have many close friends such as: Trang, Tan, Thuy.
I would like to become a successful businessman in the future. Therefore, now I am trying my best to learn harder to turn my dream into the truth.

[Thocon]

Grade: Pass

Excellent essay! Rich in content and correct grammar. Keep up the great work and I look forward to reading your second essay. Below are very few corrections to your essay:

I am a Vietnamese boy. My name is Nguyen Tien Thanh. My friends often call me with the nick name "Best @". I am seventeen years old. I was born and grew up in Hoan Lao town, Bo Trach District, Quang Binh Province. Now I am in class 11A2 of Bo Trach High School - Number 1. There are four people in my family: my father, my mother, my brother and me. My father is a soldier, and my mother works in Bo Trach Bank. My brother is a student. I love them very much and they love me too.
I go to school with my friends by bike everyday and it takes me about fifteen minutes to go from my house to school. At school, I learn many subjects but the subject I like most is English. I like studying English very much because it is very interesting and I think it will be very useful for my future job. In my opinion, the difficulties in learning English are listening, writing essays, vocabulary and pronunciation. However, I always try my best to improve them.
I have a lot of hobbies such as reading books, watching TV, playing games, and playing sports. But the thing I like most is reading books. My favorite kinds of books are novels, funny stories and detective stories. Reading books helps me entertain and relax when I feel sad and tired. I think that not only I but also everybody in the world like reading books because books play an important role in our life.
In my life, I like making friends with many people. My friends say that I am a humorous person and I think so. My friends share my happiness and sadness. They will console and help me out of difficulties. Now I have many close friends such as Trang, Tan, and Thuy.
I would like to become a successful businessman in the future. Therefore, now I am trying my best to learn harder to turn my dream into truth.

[nhanban]

Grade: pass.
I have no other words. Keep going. You will be a winner.

[Riêng]

Result: Pass

I wonder why your friends name you by "Best@". You should explain in your essay every detail, do not let the others guess what you mean.